The imagery in this piece is absolutely amazing.

Why, then, did I ding you on Technique, you may ask? A couple of reasons:

First one was the meter, in stanza three. I'm not sure if it was intentional, but the enjambment between the second and third lines sort of threw off the rhythm. Otherwise, I really enjoyed the meter in this piece.

The second reason I dinged you was that I didn't know where else to stick a ding for a spelling error that you made in the last stanza. Now, it may not have been an error, but even if it wasn't, it did mess with the flow. "Now keep *they* problems all lined up", I think it should be "thy?"

Now that the negative is all out of the way, I'm going to get on to the positive sides of this poem.

Firstly, the imagery is just absolutely wonderful, I really love how concrete and powerful it is. Everything just jumps out, and it really creates a powerful sense of the setting and what is going on in the poem. Now, that being said, I do find that the poem (coming from the view of someone obsessed with victorians) is a tad bit obscure as to what the underlying message is. After a few readings, I did start to pick up on it I think.

Overall, however, your imagery, rhythm, and general style show a great understanding of poetic devices, and thus the impact of the poem on my first reading was incredible. It comes off as being very professional, very profound, and I really enjoyed reading it. Good job!